So what do you think of this new description for Hercules Gone Mad that I’ve been working on?

So, about this new HGM description…it’s been long overdue. The last one (first one) was rather bare-boned and relied more on its association with the Heroes of Dystopia intro than on any deeper meaningful description of the book.

So, I decided to put some meat on its bones, so to speak. Check it out below and let me know what you think in the comment section please.


 

HERCULES GONE MAD Part One

HERCULES GONE MAD – Book One of the HEROES OF DYSTOPIA Saga


 

The man they call Hercules, a handle bestowed upon him while an elite warrior in the former military of the former leading World Power, struggles to maintain his sanity in a world no longer known to him, a world no longer known to anyone who has managed to survive the brutal collapse of its established order, or who is so unfortunate as to be immune to the bloody disease that has decimated the global population, or who has been captured, caged, and commoditized within a system formerly known as slavery but now is known as the market of human capital.

However, it is not the insanity that has befallen the ruined world that is tormenting and degrading the former warrior’s mind – what is eating at his sanity is the suffering from the disgrace that has befallen him. For it is his belief that he has committed the most heinous act a military man of honor and integrity could possibly commit. And it is this belief that is driving him completely mad.

As he struggles to survive the madness, Hercules must maneuver through all the evil raging around him, evil stoked by the continuing battle between the neo-collectivist revolutionaries committed to global utopia and the outlawed capitalist rebels committed to restoring a new version of the old order. As the war between the two political foes rage on, the De Borja Cartel, led by a zealot drug lord known as The Pope, seeks to leverage the chaos and extend its own corrupt domain northward.

All the while, Santa Muerte, threatened by one powerful man’s proximity to the technological attainment of a god-like immortality, mobilizes to purge the earth of its remaining living souls once and for all so that she, at last, may attain her divine ascension.

And yet nothing is as it seems…


HEROES OF DYSTOPIA Introduction
HERCULES GONE MAD Excerpt

 
 

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25 Responses to So what do you think of this new description for Hercules Gone Mad that I’ve been working on?

  1. bkraine says:

    Sounds really, really interesting, and I am going to check out the Wattpad link. With that said, whoa those are some long sentences. Can you chop ’em up a little to give the readers a bit more of a breather than the commas provide?

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  2. K'lee L. says:

    Definitely like the sound and dark tone of this. I also will check out the Wattpad link to learn more. Congratulations, Kurt!

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  3. Laura L. says:

    I read it like it was a book cover flap of a book I randomly selected. I would read the book based on this and it isn’t my normal genre. It *might* be a tad long. I don’t know. I’m still thinking in terms of book flaps. I have a short attention span when it comes to those. The first paragraph was enough to draw me in, the rest was frosting, for me.

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    • I think you’re right in terms of print books: this would probably be closest to a book flap write-up thingy. But for now this goes in Amazon’s book description slot, which, based upon my research of established writers’ book descriptions, can be either much shorter or much longer. I guess it all depends on the effectiveness of the writing. I also agree, as do other commenters, that it is a tad long. Will see what I can do to pare it down some….which is, as evident by many of my posts here, not my forte (which I recently learned is pronounced “fort” and not “fortay.” Anyway…) :)

      Thank you very much, LL!

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  4. Hersey97 says:

    So hey, I’m a fellow Wattpadder, I have a completed book you might wanna see. It’s titled Lights. The user name is Itzhersey

    I don’t see what’s wrong with the sentences, I happen to really like them.

    I happen to have found a new book for my reading list.

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  5. Did you mean “blood disease” rather than “bloody disease?” (Hope so!) As to the rest, it struck me as too dense like a condensation – trying to get everything in rather than a tantalizing lead-in. To my mind, if you have to work at the synopsis, then the tendency is to avoid the main course as simply more work. Here’s my suggestion (sorry but you asked for this) that retains all the main points:

    Hercules struggles to maintain his sanity in a world no longer known to him, a world no longer known to anyone who has managed to survive the brutal collapse of its established order, or who is so unfortunate as to be immune to the blood disease that has decimated the global population, or who has been captured, caged, and commoditized within a system formerly known as slavery but now is known as the market of human capital.
    However, it is not the insanity that has befallen the ruined world that is tormenting and degrading the former warrior’s mind but the disgrace that has befallen him. For it is his belief that he has committed the most heinous act a military man of honor and integrity could possibly commit. And it is this belief that is driving him completely mad.
    As he struggles to survive the madness, Hercules must maneuver through all the evil raging around him, evil stoked by the continuing battle between the revolutionaries for global utopia and the rebels committed to restoring the capitalist order. As the war between the two political foes rages on, a zealot drug lord known as The Pope, seeks to leverage the chaos.
    All the while, Santa Muerte mobilizes to purge the earth of its remaining living souls once and for all so that she, at last, may attain her divine ascension.
    And yet nothing is as it seems…

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    • Dude, I was so hoping you’d do something like this. I have the hardest time trying to write synopses. Off the top, I don’t see any major changes so I’ll take a closer read and hit you up via email if I have any follow up questions. Arigato!

      As for the disease, I meant bloody. Ebola would be a good example where one of the symptom is bleeding from the mouth, eyes, and other places. Blood disease sounds too neat for where I’m going.

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  6. I’m reading it like it is aimed at what goes on the back cover of a book. If that is what you are aiming for, then consider a little less art and a little more sell. As in, long sentences work better within the pages and I think that you need to let the prospective buyer know what category of story it is s/he will get immediately. If the subject matter is appealing, the customer will purchase. Give an appertiser of your art/style with your blurb, not the main meal.

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    • Thank you very much for that very helpful feedback, crafty theatre. Yeah, this would probably be closer to a book flap thing than a back cover blurb thing, if it were for a print book. Right now it’s targeted more for Amazon’s book description slot where I’ve found effective write-ups to be from a few sentences to several paragraphs. You are right that I have to give exactly what is needed to make the sell and I will try to trim this down a bit to get to that sweet spot like you recommend. Thanks again!

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  7. leebalanarts says:

    Exciting — a really good outline (overview) for the novel. Great theme. I like the metaphor and mirror-image of mythology.

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